Camp Kaitawa (Kayaking)

Here is my moment in time story, kayaking was really fun! It looked really exciting and it was! Have fun reading it.

WALT choose words that describe a moment (in an exciting way) for the reader

YOUR SIGNS OF SUCCESS

• begins in the action
• present tense (I am, not I was)
• short, sharp sentences
• strong verbs
• language features (simile, alliteration, onomatopoeia, metaphor)
• show personality (sounds like you, humour, feelings, exaggeration)

Kayaking

Splash,Splash,Splash, goes the paddles in and out of the water. “Run away from David, I mean paddle away from David” I said. We were paddling away from David (Teva’s dad) because he was in (for Tag). Bump, went the Kayak against Josh's kayak and he got stuck in 1/2 a rectangular prism in the water. He couldn't get out until he finally got out and paddled again.“Paddle slower because you’re getting me wet” said Cam, “My butts wet!” I groan. “Lets paddle over there, not there your paddling us to shore” said Cameron. “Oh man!...”  Cam looks at me “ You have to paddle us away from shore now because you paddled us over here in the first place” said Cam. “ OK, OK, OK” I said, all of a sudden a loud pitch of the whistle blows “Come on in now,other people want to have a turn so paddle back.” Cam and I were staying where we were and then the whistle blew again so we had to go back to shore, “My butt’s sooo wet from kayaking” I moan. 10 minutes later.......   “Yeahhh!” I said, I’m kayaking again but with Elijah this time!” “Left, right, left, right, left, right go right now, no no no!” said Elijah “lets go over there were Dylan and Marcus or Inderpreet. “I going to sleep OK Elijah” I said “OK”......  30 Seconds later....  Suddenly I heard a high pitch noise “Huh, what, where!” I thought I heard Elijah scream like a girl but it was the whistle! “Time to come back into shore people” Mr M said. Whizz went my feet when I slipped on the Kayak. Some of us carry the Kayaks back. We leave for Camp. “That was fun!!!!” I said to Dylan, “Next year will be fun also.”